[Takwil Puisi 33] Two Sides of a Coin

seribulan · Post time 29-10-2019 12:04 PM

Edited by seribulan at 31-10-2019 02:29 PM

Pemenang [Takwil Puisi 32] Rindu...

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Maksud penyajak-

Ikut pemahaman sy:- Kenangan yang menerjah ingatan, mengingtkan kepada seseorang, insan yang istimewa dalam hidup dia, hidup rasa kosong tanpa insan tersebut, mengakibatkan rasa rindu tak terperi, rindu yang tak mampu diluah dengan butir bicara.. Rasa rindu pada insan tersebut tak pernah surut, walau rasa pilu tetapi rasa kasih rasa sayang rasa cinta pada insan tersebut makin bertambah meskipun tak mungkin lagi untuk bersua. Seiring dengan kehidupan, rasa redha yang mampu mengekang rasa rindu dari menjadi 'barah'..Percaya pada takdir tidak di'sini', tetapi di'sana' nanti pasti akan bersua kembali dengan insan istimewa tersebut.

Puisi Minggu Ini

Tajuk Two Sides of a Coin

She was once a sunshine
Proud to exclaim she's my dream
Fate put two hearts in a bind
Thrown into a new world so extreme
Slowly ceasing the prime
Unfine, but high in esteem

"She will be gone atrophy."
No longer a trophy
Used to hold a trolley
Now hoisted with a pulley
How can I not be sorry
That sentence put her in misery

This one is from my account
Yours, only to spur on that tragic moment
You like the big amount
And agile object as adherent
But the world spins in rounds
~~Karmic payback~~ Divine retribution is occurrent

My life in animation
Like a season after the autumn
Entering the white full of avalanches
I sunk, hitting the rock-bottom
And be forgotten
Mais, you can't deny...I'm still as awesome

Adieu 3U
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sapeka · Post time 29-10-2019 12:37 PM

Tq momod

gigimukelabu · Post time 29-10-2019 06:10 PM

Thanks momod

Sajak/lirik lagu/apa2 yang puitis punyai makna tersendiri. Ikut tafsiran masing2 asalkan makna secara kasar dapat ditangkap

nurrlisa · Post time 29-10-2019 07:52 PM

Thank you Sebab tag Saya mod. Nanti saya Cuba tafsir. Such a nice poem. Sebelum tu Alex ni lelaki Atau perempuan. I need to know ada kah Ini untuk Kawan Atau Mungkin kekasih. Puisi Ini mengenai seorang perempuan materialistic haha!

kuihbakar · Post time 29-10-2019 07:56 PM

Mantap Alex s punya poem. Terkedu kakakmu ni nak takwil dik. Nanti lapang2 kakak buka kamus ya dik

seribulan · Post time 29-10-2019 07:59 PM

nurrlisa replied at 29-10-2019 06:52 PM
Thank you Sebab tag Saya mod. Nanti saya Cuba tafsir. Such a nice poem. Sebelum tu Alex ni lelaki At ...

In this poem she's a lady

Run for your lifeeeeee...

nurrlisa · Post time 29-10-2019 08:00 PM

seribulan replied at 29-10-2019 07:59 PM
In this poem she's a lady

Run for your lifeeeeee...

I see, so Alex ni perempuan?

nurrlisa · Post time 29-10-2019 08:00 PM

seribulan replied at 29-10-2019 07:59 PM
In this poem she's a lady

Run for your lifeeeeee...

I see, so Alex ni perempuan?

seribulan · Post time 29-10-2019 08:10 PM

nurrlisa replied at 29-10-2019 07:00 PM
I see, so Alex ni perempuan?

Neuter kot kat forum ni

kidding you...

Snack_Fruit · Post time 29-10-2019 10:18 PM

Iolls cuba takwil ye

Puisi ni menyatakan yang dalam setiap kisah ada 2 cerita. Untuk kisah hidup ni, ada yang bahagia dan ada yang duka.

Walaupun pada satu masa seolah2 kita juara, tapi akan ada satu ketika kita bukan siapa2. Dunia ni bulat. So jatuh tak bermaksud sentiasa kalah. Akan tiba masa, kita juga boleh menyerlah

KILL_NANCY · Post time 30-10-2019 02:55 AM

two sides of a coin.each side is distinct.

sherlock mode ON.

stanza one

aleX-S describes a subject’s emotionally revelatory journey into a darkening side landscape .... aha .... she begins by introducing the setting and how it impacts her emotional being.

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her steps are talking her farther away from civilization and deeper into an every growing darkness .... and she has entered into this new world, distant from the company of others, she feels herself evaporating soooooooooooooooo far into the dark.

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stanza two

"trolley " heavily suggests that she is suffering due to the situation around her."pulley" - giving herself a second chance at life after having suffered a tremendous loss in the war of desire.

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stanza three

aleX-S says, "but the world spins in rounds," introducing the subject of the karmic example.the concept of divine retribution itself and as we know this concept simplifies the task of discovering what is right(rewarded) and what is wrong(punished).aleX-S who also has access to the characters’ feelings is generally not explicit about what happens in the poetry [refer : yours, only to spur on that tragic moment, you like the big amount].while she describes the character and the events in detail, she does not comment further on the connection between character's behaviour and the meaning of the events .... <<<< asecretis like a dove : when it leaves my hand it takes wing ....

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stanza four

this journey out into the darkness of the landscape is not a horrorying one.the fear of forgetting and of being forgotten is "the real deal" to her subject (read : athazagoraphobia).

Mais, you can't deny...I'm still as awesome

she might be overwhelmed by what she is feeling but in this case it is a good thing.its exactly what she needed.

KILL_NANCY · Post time 30-10-2019 02:56 AM

nurrlisa replied at 29-10-2019 08:00 PM
I see, so Alex ni perempuan?

hoh loh.ore tino.

aleX-S · Post time 30-10-2019 06:00 AM

Edited by aleX-S at 29-10-2019 10:51 PM

gigimukelabu replied at 29-10-2019 10:10 AM
Thanks momod

Sajak/lirik lagu/apa2 yang puitis punyai makna tersendiri. Ikut tafsiran masing2 ...

I did this poem while humming westlife's songs. Baby, I know the story ba ba black sheep can't believe that I'm the fool againnnnnn + try again.....never stop believing, try againnnnnnn

aleX-S · Post time 30-10-2019 06:03 AM

Edited by aleX-S at 29-10-2019 10:41 PM

nurrlisa replied at 29-10-2019 11:52 AM
Thank you Sebab tag Saya mod. Nanti saya Cuba tafsir. Such a nice poem. Sebelum tu Alex ni lelaki At ...

It's a unisex name sis. Dekat dp, dia alex udinov dalam nikita

Materialistic? Guess everyone else is like that too. Cuma dapat tak dapat, nak tak nak, ada tak ada, buat tak buat jer sis, two sides of a coin

aleX-S · Post time 30-10-2019 06:04 AM

Snack_Fruit replied at 29-10-2019 02:18 PM
Iolls cuba takwil ye

Puisi ni menyatakan yang dalam setiap kisah ada 2 cerita. Untuk kisah hidup ...

thank you

aleX-S · Post time 30-10-2019 06:07 AM

KILL_NANCY replied at 29-10-2019 06:55 PM
two sides of a coin.each side is distinct.

sherlock mode ON.

Kakak nancyyyyyyy, diksi saya dalam ni senang cam budak darjah 3U jer, doesn't even have a syntax aaaa kena bedah, terus masuk kelas psychology 101

Agathachristiephobia menda tu, buat saya terfikir nak buat puisi pasal albatross. However, saya pilih untuk tidur