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veri sopan *tak jerit*
Ben, the two of us need look no more // superb!!!! but hati2 dengan word ben 'coz u drag it too long i suppose it refer to couple of notes, but you add 1 additional note, maybe ade orang muzik tak suka  )
We both found what we were looking for // superb!!! (but the hook for looking for , you bend down the key, as ot suppose it bend up, pencipta lagu ini maybe ade tujuan bila dia bend up!, but to ok )
With a friend to call my own // ok but if u can stress word 'friend' it will be superb
I'll never be alone //ok,
And you, my friend, will see // ok
You've got a friend in me // ok bif. 'me' tambah another 1 second vibrato, ok but u can be superb!
Ben, you're always running here and there //ok, but if u press word 'running' it will be superb
You feel you're not wanted anywhere // ok
If you ever look behind //ok, but behind flat
And don't like what you find // ok and sensual sexi
There's something you should know // ok, just nice
You've got a place to go // superb actually , but if i were you i will delyed at 'to' then connect with go, so it won't be that stacatto
I used to say "I" and "me" // Superb!
Now it's "us", now it's "we" // Superb! but 'now' u lambat setengah second i guest
I used to say "I" and "me" // Superb! so pro here! thats u repeat I and me I and me, wow so menjadi here.... really sexual
Now it's "us", now it's "we" //eh ni bukan u hehehe
Ben, most people would turn you away // ok but your hook at away is flat
I don't listen to a word they say // ok , you tend to bend down the key , i notice it, u can do it, but not at every all end!!
They don't see you as I do // ok, but 'I' flat
I wish they would try to // superb! and so sensual , dreamy and secci. i love your "try to" , so secci and have sex attraction
I'm sure they'd think again // i dun know this part, something wrong, but i dun know wat it is
If they had a friend like Ben // superb!
(a friend) Like Ben // superb!
(like Ben) Like Ben // superb!
overall sudah ok laa.... but if you nak go topro standar wherever u go, maybe u shud consider what i'm saying above. u do big major changes at 2 places. when the key should bend up, u bend it down. If I were the creator of tis song, i wud rather not like it, coz to me, i do it on purpose hokkay. 
dulu: 3/5
now: 3.9/5
but having said that, this song amat seswai at majlis makan malam atau pak cik ajami , i think it already can mesmerize many
[ Last edited by alyana at 20-12-2008 05:03 PM ] |
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